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This is an artwork by Botticelli. Here he depicts a famous story in the Bible where Jesus is going to pray in the garden before he is arrested. Another fact that goes along with the story are the three disciples sleeping at the base of the garden. The way that Botticelli separates Jesus from the rest of the men is by the light halo on his head. An interesting fact about Jesus is that he was painted with red garments. The significance is that red could represent blood and he was about to spill a lot of it. Probably the most interesting aspect of the painting would have to be the angel. What gender is the angel? Botticelli looks like he tried to not give a gender to the angel because it has physical features that could fit a male or female. Also, the angel gives off a slightly negative vibe. The angles wings are black instead of yellow or gold, some bright color.
Botticelli guides the viewer’s eyes down the painting. The painter first sees the angel in the sky reaching out its arms. Then the viewer goes down the body of Jesus down the path. At the end of the path you come across the final object of the painting which is the three disciples sleeping. One last interesting thing of the painting is the placement of Jesus’ hands. If you look closely you can see that they are almost in the position of having bonds on them.

Advertisement

The first thing to catch the eye of anyone looking at this advertisement would most likely be the soldier’s helmet and the colors. What really sets the mood of the picture is the lighting. The way the color transitions from a cold, dark blue on the left top corner to a warming yellow- orange and how the sky has the same effect from top to bottom. This gives off a feel of comfort or of relief. What is so odd is that this is contradictory of what most people know of Halo. Most people know that the Halo games are action packed and far from relieving. Even the Mature rating in the bottom left hand corner implies this. However, the way the sun is setting and giving of those warming beams of light give the viewer a feel of completion. A feel that the quest is complete, implies otherwise. Also, there is what looks like ruins in the background which gives off the impression of “mission complete.”

Probably the most impressive aspect of the advertisement is the soldier and his weapon. If the viewer were to give a closer look at the suit and gun of the soldier they would notice that they seem worn out, as if they have been through a plentiful amount of combat. But more interesting is the helmet. The picture never shows the man’s face, only the orange visor. This leaves the man’s facial expression to the viewer’s imagination. Now the viewer becomes curious and may want to actual experience the conflict with the soldier to then gain an understanding what he or she could be thinking and what sort of face they might have in the picture. Whether its one of relief of completion or of sadness due to failure. This then leads to playing the game.

Revision Process

The revision process is probably the second most important step in writing any paper. What is a paper if you don’t go back and make sure it is right. The main thing that you get out of revising is correcting simple mistakes. Most of the time people write something that sounds good in their head but doesn’t make sense if someone else reads it. A way to test this is by reading the paper out loud to yourself; however, the best way to revise a paper is to read it to other people. This way you get others opinions that will help your paper while making sure it makes sense. The way I am going to try to apply the process to my own paper is to simply make the paper better. Of course I am going to try and spot grammatical errors and such but there is more than that. With the first draft I have the basic concepts and outline for the paper. Now I can concentrate on putting more tension in places that seem to get boring. Also I am able to put a story where I believe the paper needs an example of a point or just some more detail. The main way that I will apply revisions is by reading my own paper in the reader’s point of view. I will try to pinpoint when things get boring or unclear or even if it just does not help my subject. In all, I am going to focus on my paper being entertaining and not becoming a boring read

Magazine

In Sports Illustrated everything is about sports. The categories range from baseball to football and soccer to NASCAR. In the table of contents there are such titles as Motor Sports, Baseball, and To Shackle Shaq. After that, the writers do a very good job in pulling in the reader. On the next couple of pages are high resolution pictures that were taken during major sports events. When it comes to the actual length of the articles it depends on the significance. For example, the main article about Shaquile O’Neal is three pages long with another full page dedicated to a blown up picture of him; however, the other articles average about a page or page and a half. In these articles the writers do a good job in giving essential information to educate the reader about the person’s background or success to then add new information that has currently happened. In Derek Jeter’s article they give a comparison of his batting average now to what it used to be. Also, they compare his homerun count to the homerun leader’s count.
Of course this magazine is going to target men. It would be a correct assumption to say that a greater amount of men are interested in sports than women. For this reason all the advertisements are directed towards men. On several pages there are advertisements for tucks and sports cars. There are even pages for male weight loss supplements and cholesterol pills.

Literacy Narrative Brainstorm

The idea for my literacy narrative is not certain but it may revolve around football. My coaches, teammates, and family will be important in this topic. Even though I had many coaches probably one will stand out. He was my position coach. The main reason that he is significant to me is that he is the one that taught me the game of football. He taught me tendencies, reads and how to be a leader. This guy was a short, white haired marine. He loved to yell and run around with the same patriot football hat while coaching us at the top of his lungs. Also, there were my parents. The ones who went to every game and no matter how I played were always there for me. They stayed positive while I was negative and stayed strong when I wanted to give up. Right next to them was my brother who took the time during every game to do me a favor. He took film of me playing from the stands with our miniature sized camera so that I would have memories of my games. However, the most important people were my teammates. These were the ones that made the experience worth everything. From fooling around in the locker to hit- its in football camp, we were all in the ride together. Definitely my teammates forwarded my progress in football. I will always remember the smell of the pads in the locker room and the looks on their faces when we were dead tired in the fourth quarter waiting for the final whistle to blow. Most of all I will have the friendships to remember.

Wind Power in Pacific Northwest

The first paragraph provides support for the main point that wind power is not reliable. By simply stating that wind power is not reliable the reader wouldn’t know that wind power cannot provide enough electricity when it is needed. For example, most people would not have made the connection that when there is no wind is the time when they need to cool their homes and that during a blizzard is when they need to heat their homes. Both of which require more energy than usual. Expanding the support in this way educates the reader and makes them aware of simple issues.
Paragraph two is centralized around the thesis of “there are major unsolved problems involved in the design of wind-generation facilities.” Leaving the thesis in this state without support really doesn’t say much at all. Almost everything has some faults yet can have plenty of good. As the paper is not intended for engineers the writer must enlighten us in some of the major faults. Supports such as, “ice storms causing damage to rotating blades” and “high winds in the area escalating the cost” show the reader that it really is not financially smart to place these facilities in the mountains where they are needed.
“The environmental impact of building thousands of wind towers would be enormous,” is probably the most obvious thesis. All the writer had to do was throw a bunch of numbers at the reader to show how many wind towers would be needed for efficiency. This paints a picture in the reader’s head of fields of wind towers which have destroyed acres of beautiful land.

journal entry 1

My favorite piece of writing that i have done would be my paper about Minoru Yamasaki’s twin towers of the World Trade Center. This was my research paper in junior year which I had to present in front of the class. We all had to choose an artist and one of their great projects in which to write about. So, I chose the lead architect for the twin towers, Minoru Yamasaki. What really prompted me to write this paper was how man could complete an enormous task of ascending a building one hundred and ten stories into the sky in 1970. A feat of this magnitude is hard enough to accomplish today with all of our advanced technology especially for what they ad beck then. Therefore, a structure this big most definitely became a symbol of strength to New York City and America. Even though they were knocked down, I would argue to say that they have become an even bigger symbol now that they have changed America in the twenty- first century.

Without a doubt, this research paper is written in closed form top-down thesis- based prose. Largely because this is where i believe i write the best. I am more comfortable writing in a planned out consistent form. Although i do try to write more and more in open form, i believe my papers are more scattered and incoherent when i do not follow a pre-meditated plan.